Daisies & Heartbreak (a haibun)

I hand her a bouquet of flowers in the shadows: daisies, her favorite. A token of my love, a symbol of my guilt. For my sins, my mistake. It is a peace offering, made in the dying light of our backyard.

She accepts daisies
Takes them and leaves for good
Relationship done

(Photo by Caseen Kyle Registos on Unsplash)

Author’s Note: This is my first attempt at a haibun, a Japanese poetic form that combines prose and haiku. I’ve seen others use the haibun form here on WordPress, and I wanted to give it a shot.

Side note: The poem is pure fiction and was inspired by the photo. There was something about the shadowed flowers that made me go darker and think of the end of a relationship, instead of something more hopeful.

6 thoughts on “Daisies & Heartbreak (a haibun)

  1. Terveen Gill July 1, 2021 / 9:43 am

    Oh no! That didn’t go as expected.
    Oh well, I hope there are more daisies. 🙂

  2. Lucy July 1, 2021 / 10:46 am

    I love how dark you went here. It really is heartbreaking but so beautifully portrayed with your prosody. I enjoyed reading this.

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